When we last left Tristan he was busy drowning.
I’m reading the sequel to Red Rising at the moment and it also features the protagonist in water-based peril (the robot suit he’s in is hit with an EMP and he falls into a deep river), except it gets around the problem I talked about earlier where there’s no tension because you know full well the main character isn’t going to die. We actually see Darrow cutting himself out of the suit and swimming to the surface, unlike here where Tristan falls unconscious and we immediately go “oh someone’s going to rescue him then”, and a bunch of his friends and allies are in the same situation so there’s a lot of tension around whether he can not just save himself but also rescue them.
He had heard many stories about the Afterlife back when he was alive,
Earlier we were told that he had no idea what the Afterlife is and hadn’t even bothered to ask anyone until a few months before his 30th birthday. Maybe it’s because I’m editing a second draft at the moment, but there’s a whole lot of stuff in this book that feels like a first draft that was never given a rewrite.
Anyway Tristan sees some naked people splashing around in a stream, then wakes up with Wigg sitting next to him.
Wigg’s familiar left eyebrow came up.
At least it’s not infamous this time.
Wigg claims that Tristan was actually seeing him and Geldon washing the polluted water from themselves rather than the Afterlife. Apparently they just left Tristan lying on the river bank, unconscious. I don’t think that’s what you’re supposed to do.
It felt good to have the black trousers, leather vest, and knee boots on again,
Just in case you forgot how stupid Tristan’s outfit is.
He took time to look about the Parthalonian countryside as they went along and found it to be not unlike his native land. The trees seemed to grow taller here and some of the sounds of the forest were unfamiliar to him, but he recognized most of the birds and small animals he saw.
Pretty sure that wouldn’t be the case considering the two areas have to have been separated for a looooong time. Unless it turns out that when they crossed the Sea of Whispers they were actually looping around to the far side of the same continent and Parthalon is across the mountain range around Eutracia. That would be kind of amusing.
It’s going to take them two days to reach the Recluse, which added to the two days they spent waiting for Geldon means they’ll only have 48 hours to stop the sorceresses. Throw in probable capture by the enemy and some additional time-wastage and you’ve got a recipe for a last-minute climactic battle!
Eventually they spot a place where Minions leave people out to die for giant vultures or something and Tristan is all like “I MUST HAVE MAN-VENGEANCE” and Wigg is like “no Tristan that’s stupid” and Tristan is like “I DON’T CARE I’M GOING TO DO IT”. Remember earlier, when Tristan basically announced that he was going to do something stupid later out sheer stubbornness? Remember?
Tristan’s motivations make absolutely zero sense, even with how fucking irrational he’s been earlier. He’s trying to save the entire world, if he dies literally everyone is screwed, but he’s willing to risk all that just to satisfy his need for revenge against the Minions. There’ll be tons of Minions at the recluse, why no wait until after you kill the Sorceresses?
It couldn’t be more obvious that this is just in here to satisfy some plot requirement.
Wigg continued to look into the eyes of the Chosen One he had seen born, struggle, and suddenly learn so much about himself. But there is still so much more to know, Wigg thought.
How many times has Wigg thought about how much more Tristan has to learn? Like 500?
Wigg eventually agrees to go with Tristan, since he can’t use wizarding to stop him.
What Tristan saw below him was unimaginable.
This sentence seems oddly familiar…
What Tristan saw beyond the trees took his breath away.
What Tristan saw below him took his breath away.
What Tristan saw next would remain lodged in his memories forever.
What he saw would remain lodged in his mind forever.
Tristan froze, amazed at what he saw before him.
and despite the severity of the circumstances, what he saw almost took his breath away.
What he saw would stay in his memories for the rest of his life.
What he saw took his breath away, and he could feel his eyes begin to tear.
What he saw made the breath leave his lungs in disbelief.
When he finally stood at the top, what he saw made his jaw drop.
Most of these are Dramatic Single-Sentence Paragraphs too.
They find six people attached to wooden wheels on poles and left to starve or die form exposure. All of the people have white angel wings, in contrast to the Minion’s flappity black wings, which clearly means they’re good instead of evil. If there wasn’t so much horrible violence and gore this book could be aimed at five year olds.
‘It is known as the Vale of Torment, and it is used as a place of execution by the Minions,’ Geldon whispered back. ‘The ones you see on the wheels are actually of Minion birth themselves. One of every five thousand children is born blond, with white wings.
Hey the blonde, pretty white people are persecuted isn’t that a shocker. I mean as far as I can tell the Minions have white skin as well- everyone seems to except for Succiu- but the colour-coding here is still making me roll my eyes.
The white-winged Minions, who are called the Gallipolai, are also all gentle and loving and shit, because as I said this book is for five year olds.
Oh and the only Gallipolai woman was raped, because of course.
Geldon announces that there are Minions nearby and Tristan is all MAAAAAANGEANCE and charges off to skewer them. I hope he gets killed.